Shadows past echo love waiting.
Never touched; forbidden, aching
Smiles not seen; distance breaking
Oceans of days wasted, not taking
Laughter unheard; seasons changing
Beaches not walked; footprints fading
Spirits entwined.
True love still waiting.
Forever will be
And friendship is all we鈥檙e taking|||Fabulous! It is amaaaazing, keep it up! When I read it, I can relate very strongly, and feel lots of emotion.
Nice job :D|||not too bad actually|||Being a Poet myself I have 2 say I think its good. True poetry it the emotions and creativity of the poet. Visit www.allpoetry.com and get some good feed back as well as publish your work. Good Luck!|||The last four lines break away from what your overall pattern was, I would put them together and revise the last line
Example:
Shadows past echo love waiting.
Never touched; forbidden, aching
Smiles not seen; distance breaking
Oceans of days wasted, not taking
Laughter unheard; seasons changing
Beaches not walked; footprints fading
Spirits entwined; true love still waiting
Forever will be, friendship is taken|||wow. ur good!
